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Looking for feedback/questions on this alien species from a hard sf setting I've created.

Looking for feedback/questions on this alien species from a hard sf setting I've created.

NYC_hydra

The vivillir came last to the solar system. They lack any concept of borders, counties or laws. They basically only live for the sake of themselves and the few individuals they care about. They do have cultures and sometimes have corporations, clans or tribes, but a true organized society seems impossible for them. They don't feel any empathy towards strangers, and morality doesn't really exist for them (they could see a brutal murder and wouldn't care). Their own drive in life seems to be that of personal or familial profit. This isn't to say they can't care about others, if someone is their friend or family they'll become very attached and affectionate towards them (they are known to 'bond' with others, causing extreme attachment), they just don't care about strangers. They came to the solar system as immigrants not colonizers, hoping to trade in the new system, and they mostly live among humans now. They are mostly merchants or traveling workers in the solar system, but they have been known to very easily fall in to crime. However they've mostly assimilated well with humanity, understanding human morality and law on an intellectual level, and benefiting society through trade. Also the organ that looks like a head is for asexual reproduction. I thought you should know that.


Quantext609

The design is pretty cool. It reminds me of mollusks, especially of snails and squids. The only ways I think it could be improved would be to reduce the mouth tentacle and to add more girth to the leg tentacles. Having a mouth connected via a tentacle is very dangerous since it can be easily lopped off and starve the individual. Meanwhile the legs don't seem strong enough to stand upright unless this is a particularly aquatic or low gravity species. Also how have they achieved space travel if they're an asocial species? Social values are the reason why humanity has achieved its great feats because people with different strengths can work together and knowledge can be passed down through the generations. No one person could build a cell phone for example. You can even see this in social insects like ants or bees. They're one of the only animals who actually build homes and can only do it because they work together. Therefor, I see it difficult for such a selfish species to actually make it to space travel on their own considering they'd have no reason to work with each other. Maybe they could do it if they were given or stole the technology from another more social species, but that's the only way.


NYC_hydra

>Also how have they achieved space travel if they're an asocial species? Interaction with other species.


Globin347

The eyestalks seem unreasonably long and easily damaged. Also, if the eyes are farther from the brain, the creature won’t be able to react to things as quickly. In addition, it looks like it would have trouble supporting it’s body weight under earth gravity. Also, if gene transfer is involved, then this species uses sexual reproduction. Sexual reproduction is specifically the transfer of genes to create offspring. In addition, if the species is antisocial, Then it is unlikely they would be capable of understanding any language, even if they are otherwise very intelligent. Check out r/speculativeevolution for advice tailored to this sort of thing.


NYC_hydra

>Also, if gene transfer is involved, then this species uses sexual reproduction. Sexual reproduction is specifically the transfer of genes to create offspring. They're not transferring genes the same way vertebrates do though. >Check out r/speculativeevolution for advice tailored to this sort of thing. I have.


Globin347

I see... partly. How exactly are the exchanging genes? Also, sorry if I came off as patronizing.


NYC_hydra

>How exactly are the exchanging genes? Add eachothers genes to their own genomes. >Also, sorry if I came off as patronizing. Nah, it's fine.


LISTETC

Are you really looking for feedback though? You've been making this same post for years now. You ask for feedback on your creatures design, you ignore most of the advice, and you repeat the cycle after some time has passed. Your setting is supposed to be hard sci fi, and yet you have refused to make changes that would make your creature's design more realistic. Either change the design or admit your setting isn't hard sci fi.


NYC_hydra

I keep forgetting about this setting then remembering to work on it again. This is a new starting point right now.


RommDan

How do they wear hats?


NYC_hydra

Badly.


RommDan

Then you need to fix that lol XD


JAMES_IS_THE_1

Yup, you can never have too many tentacles. Also I think that the tentacles should be thinner to make interaction with things easier.